2016年11月26日雅思考试真题写作范文

2016年11月26日雅思考试真题写作范文

这是2016年11月26日雅思考试的大作文原题,由麦考瑞雅思老师焦若男原创。如果雅思大作文想拿至少7分,可以参考焦老师的雅思写作用词、雅思写作句型,尤其是论证方式。

 

People believe that using mobile phones and computers to communicate make us lose the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 

Keywords: use of technology, ability to communicate

 

It may be a shared acknowledgement that the information technology has profoundly transformed the way people socialize and interact. However, many have been pondering the pros and cons of these high-tech devices in the fear of being paralyzed and deprived of ability to carry out face communication. From where I stand, this kind of doom and gloom is completely bilateral.

 

There is no denying that human communication is by no means the original and face-to-face way we use in the past, when you can pick up the other person’s emotions and delicate implications directly all by observing his or her facial expressions as well as body languages. However, this doesn’t mean we are losing touch of this ability that is embedded in our genes. Human communication has come a long way from the very first language hundreds of thousands years ago to the 21th century, when we adopt computers and phones as major supplements to boost the indispensable efficiency. Therefore, it’s only natural for mankind to keep updating and perfecting our communication system.

 

Those who are strongly against the discussed devices may argue that the number of people feeling isolated and powerless when facing a crowd is steadily on the rise. They wholeheartedly believe the devices are to blame for this phenomenon. However, the truth is that the modern society is not for everyone since it demands great mental strength to take on the ongoing pressure and sometimes catastrophic frustration merely to survive. It is unfair to hold technology guilty for the distance among one another created by insufficient communication under the crazy tempo of modern life.

 

To sum up, technology is not the real culprit for certain people’s inability to conduct face-to-face communication. If any, it helps to stay close and intimate people with their loved ones, thus reducing the awkwardness when they actually meet in person.

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Analysis

本文话题:技术以及人类沟通能力

A.表层分析:

1.贴近话题以及亮点词汇: information technology, high-tech devices, delicate implications, facial expressions, body languages, embedded in genes, 21th century, mankind, tempo of life, communication system

2. 修饰性词汇(副词,形容词等):bilateral, paralyzed, original, indispensable, natural, isolated and powerless, ongoing, catastrophic, guilty, crazy(简单词, 但使用生动), close and intimate,(本文使用不少并列修饰词,增强语言节奏感)

3.固定搭配:见原文加粗内容

4.语法广度:宾语从句;非限定性定语从句(when和where引导);状语从句;定语从句;插入语;善用副词;形式主语从句。

B.中层分析:

Body 1:让步+转折论证

尽管人类的沟通方式已经不像过去那样原始,仅仅通过面部观察的直接方式来交流,但是这不意味着我们在失去这种与生俱来的能力,并且,人类的交流方式自古以来一直在进化,技术作为当时沟通体系的补充,是很自然的变化。

Body 2:让步+转折论证

强烈反对技术的人可能会声称在人群中孤僻、手足无措的人在稳步增加,但是,这不是技术的错。这只是现代社会快节奏下压力造成的结果。

论证特点:每个论证段的论证广度充分,思辨性强。

C.整体分析:

TR:扣题,论证充分,逻辑合理

LR:用词较为准确,贴近话题,

CC:连贯性较好,副词的使用增强逻辑感(例如:It’s only natural…)

GRA:广度和准确性较好,以擅用定语从句(限定性和非限定性)和状语从句为亮点

 

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