The diagram shows the stages in the process of making chocolate.( 小作文的第一句都要用一般现在时。流程图需要三个字: process 整个过程; stage 阶段; step 步骤)
Chocolate comes from the cacao tree, which is grown in parts of South America, Africa and Indonesia.( 一开始不能直接引入 cacao tree,，但是由关键字 chocolate 引出，否则太突兀了)
流程图特点 2: 大量使用属性从句连接两个相关句子。
流程图特点3: 大量使用被动语音 The tree produces large red pods which contain white cocoa beans.
流程图特点 4: 使用一些表示顺序的连接词 when the pods are ripe, they are harvested, the beans are removed and they are fermented for several days in large wooden boxes.( 三个句子的并列: “句子 A, 句子 B and 句子 C”。)
During the fermenting process, the beans turn brown.
Next, the brown beans are spread in the sun to dry. They are then put in large sacks and transported by train or lorry. After this, the beans are taken to a chocolate factory where they are roasted in an oven at temperatures of between and 350 degree Celsius. 250
After being roasted, the beans are crushed and the outer shell is removed. This part is not needed for making chocolate. Finally, the inner part of the bean is pressed and liquid chocolate is produced.
流程图特点 6: 一般不需要写总结
The process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry can be outlined in seven consecutive steps. First the raw material, clay, which was just below the surface of soil in certain clay-rich areas has to be dug up by a digger.
Then the lumps of clay are placed on a metal grid in order to break up the big chunks of clay into much smaller areas, which fall through the metal grid onto a roller, whose motion further segregates the bits of clay. Sand and water are added to make a homogenous mixture, which is then either formed in moulds or cut into brick-shaped pieces by means of a wire cutter.
Those fresh bricks are then kept in a drying oven for at least 24 and a maximum of 48 hours, several dozens if not hundreds of bricks at a time. The dried bricks are then transferred to a so-called kiln, another type of high temperature oven. First they are kept at a moderate temperature of 200 °c-1300 This process is followed by cooling down the finished bricks for 48 to 72 hours in a cooling chamber.
Once the bricks have cooled down and have become hard, they get packaged and delivered to their final destination, be it a building site or storage.
This response fully satisfies the requirements of the task. All key features of each stage of the process are appropriately and accurately presented. An excellent overview is given at the beginning of the response and this skilfully incorporates part of the rubric, changing the grammatical function, to give a brief summary of the whole process. The message is very easy to read, with seamless cohesion that attracts no attention. Paragraphing, linking and referencing are all skilfully managed. The language used is very fluent and sophisticated. A wide range of vocabulary and structures are used with full flexibility and accuracy. Only rare minor 'slips' can be found and these do not detract from the high rating.
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