Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the 'real world' when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self- evident, but in fact require closer examination. ( 58words )
尤其是这句话的后半句: but in fact require closer examination , 感觉就像扔砖头、扔石头一样。
The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching moneywhen times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, thoseborn with a silver spoon in their mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education. (100words)
1 '3 模式，第1 句是主题句。请注意，从本段内容来看，这是一个让步段 (即分析你不同意的观点)。虽然 4 征文的主节是两边都在讨论的，但是薛老师还是很喜欢这篇文章的，就是主节的观点还是比较集中的, 把特许区放在前面，最后一个 这句话引出下一段，自然是过分的，自己的观点也比较清楚!
The basis of this argument is , of course, knowing the value of money, and the idea that children of the poor know this, and those of the wealthy do not 。Who though, is in a better position to teach their children the value of money; someone skilled in earning and keeping it, the wealthy parent, or someone who can not seem to acquire it, the poor parent? Both wealthy and poor children are equally likely to acquire an education in money, whether it is formal, or in the school of hard knocks. Conversely, both children are as likely to ignore this education. (101words)
这一段内容感觉写得不够直接，还是在分析对方观点的漏洞!请注意，前面的让步段落已经写了这一点，那么这一段最好能正面展示自己的观点，这样更符合内容。 convincing 一点点!
A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.
评论: 最后一段有点像提出解决这个问题的办法，也就是说，education. 它并没有简单地重申它作为传统结尾段落的观点。
看了全文的发现。作者显然不同意该主题的陈述，即 Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. 但是，作者是更倾向于穷人的孩子，还是富人的孩子？文章认为，作者是中立的。他看重的是他们接受的教育。
In other words, 整篇文章是中性写作。在雅思考试中，经常会用到这种写法，而且还是很实用的。你可以学。
另外，文章中有很多好词好句，尤其是长句，值得模仿。这篇文章是雅思 9 分作文。