《剑桥雅思4》Test 3小作文剖析
题型
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
范文:
The graph illustrates the proportion of males and females in various age groups who regularly engaged in physical exercise in Australia in 2010.
Under the age of 45, the gender difference between these men and women was big in 2010. Most strikingly, 53.3% of women between 35 and 44 years old did regular physical activity while only 39.5% of their male counterparts did so. Also, between 25 and 34 years old, a higher proportion of women than men regularly engaged in physical exercise (48.9% and 42.2% respectively). In contrast, with regard to people between 15 and 24 years old, a higher percentage of males regularly exercised than that of females (52.8% and 47.4% respectively).
After reaching the age of 45, higher proportions of women than men engaged in regular physical activity. There was a gap of over 10% between males and females aged from 45 to 54 (43.1% and 53.3% respectively). This gap was less prominent for 55-to-64-year-olds (45.1% for men and 53% for women). The gender difference was minimal when it came to people aged 65 and over (around 47% for both men and women).
In sum, the older the men were, the lower the number of men who exercised regularly before 45, but after 45, an increasing proportion of them involved in such activities.
1. 构思分析
小作文什么数据该写?什么无需写?
依据《剑桥雅思4》Test 3小作文评委范文,图中全部数据都应当写.
依据海外写毕业论文的规范,相近剑12 Test 5的数据图表的所有数据都应当写出去.
将什么信息提到一起?(如何把信息排序?)
合理的排序方式,能让文章内容较为好写.在考虑到这一题型的那时候,人们特别是在要考虑到 写什么比照 (comparisons).
一个关键(可是又一直被考鸭忘却)的比照是,同一个年龄层中性别比例的 尺寸关联 .要写这一点,就不可以将一个年龄层下的男和女的占比拆分离,要 一起写 .那麼,人们总有了 6组不能分拆的信息 ,接下去要考虑到的是如何把这6组信息 分成2个大组 .
一般会考虑到的方式 是男士高过女士的分成一个大组,女士高过男士的分成另一个大组.可是,这一题型的一个特性取决于:男士高过女士的,只能一组(15-24岁).依照左右的排序方式,就必然出現一个大组包括了5个年龄层(10个数据),另一个大组包括1个年龄层(2个数据),它是不太好的按段.
因此,对于这一题型,还要 此外动脑子 了.例如, 依照年纪来分大组 :45岁左右和下列各一个大组.那样,能确保每一大组有3组数据(6个).因此,就获得了这篇范文的构造.
2. 创作难题分析
它是动态图還是静态数据图?
静态数据图,因此increase/decrease等词不可以出現在优秀作文中.
men who did regular physical activity有木有替换成?
1. men who did regular physical exercise 2. men who regularly exercised 3. men who engaged in regular physical activity 4. men who involved in regular physical activity
The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
最先,提2个难题
1. 这一题应当作为动态图還是静态数据图来写?
2. 里边包括的18个数据是不是应当所有列举?
假如你看看明白了《剑桥雅思8》Test2小作文评委范文,参考答案会很清晰——
作为动态图来写,数据无需所有列举.
作为动态图来写,必然每一个頻率相匹配的3个占比应当写出一组,那麼就等于有6组不可缺少信息要写.
人们还得将这6组信息分成2-3个大组.
较为显著,能够依据数据的尺寸排序,获得
once a week和once or twice a month分成一个大组; several times a week和a few times a year分成一个大组; every day和never分成一个大组.